Aiko RP Sample

Aiko's parents the founders of the Hatara clan wanted their son to be one of the best ninja's in the world. Since they were already rouged they had a plan so that he wouldnt be like them. When they born him they would seal a quarter of the 0 tail's power inside Aiko and a quarter or the 0 tail's power to each of them. They thought that they would live to see the day that their son be a great powerful ninja. But they were wrong. Little did they know that the 0 tail's obsession for darkness would overfeed them. So the day they born Keii they had it all planned out. They would seal the 0 tail inside him and inside themselves. The only problem was they still had evil inside them and the 0 tail took advantage of that and overpowered them killing them. Once the 0 tail was inside Aiko he couldn't find any evil inside him since he was just a newborn. So he the beast wanted to test this human and sealed itself inside it's own darkness. Only when the darkness started to overpower Aiko that the beasts power would come out. Once the beast was sealed inside Aiko his skin became a little bit softer and more greasy. His skin would heal from minor damage since the leech would heal it and he could spit out venom like a snake. Aiko would only be able to use a quarter of the beasts power since it sealed most of it's power inside it's own darkness. The next day after Aiko was born a Keiigakure villager found him next to a tree crying almost to death. Keiigakure is a minor village that Aiko has been for his whole life. It is a minor village next to Iwagakure and usually get their supplies from their. That villager would soon to become his step-dad and his wife would be Keii's step-mom. They wouldnt tell Keii his secret until he was 14. So for 3 years Keii lived with his step-mom and step-dad until a tragic day happened. Keii was to small to remember this day but when 3 missing ninja came into Keiigakure to steal it's headbands. Once Aiko got outside to see what was happening the 0 tails took control and sucked out all of the darkness of the 3 missing ninja's and draw it into it's own darkness. That was when everyone in the village knew that Keii was a jinchuriki. Ever since that day they all started to treat Keii different and treat him like a monster. His first day at the academy was a disaster. Even his teacher didnt even want to teach him but he was forced to. Once Aiko had master of chakra his teacher noticed something outstanding. He noticed that Aiko had control of dark chakra. His teacher studied the 0 tail and discovered that anytime Aiko uses it's darkness he also uses it's dark chakra. Also the bijuu feeds on dark chakra and will kill anything that is in Keii's way. His teacher was happy and wanted to use Keii for his own purposes. But he 0 tail knew this and took advantage of using the teachers darkness to kill him. After that Keii just took a headband thinking that an assassin killed his academy teacher. When he lied that he was a genin his sensei wanted to test him and he didnt even know the clone technique. So Keii told him that his academy teacher was killed so after intense training Keii learned the Substitution, Clone and Transformation techniques. After that training Hakura(Keii's sensei) knew that Aiko had the 0 tail but never treated him different. All he ever told Keii was ''Always believe in yourself.'' After those words Aiko trained real hard to be a great ninja. After years and years of training Keii was a great genin and thought of joining the Chunin Exams. There he figured out that he was a jinchuikri. After watching battles he had his own battle with a smart ninja. There the smart ninja learned how Aiko fought and smiled he told Keii ''Hey you stupid genin. Dont you know that your a jinchuriki? That's why everyone treats you different. You are just to dumb are you?'' Keii didnt believe him at first but when he lost at the Chunin Exams everyone at Keiigakure told him. Keii was devastated and at least wanted his own village to tell him. He ran away and a few days later met a few rouge ninja's that new his parents. Keii joined them and told them to tell them the story of his parents and how his clan formed. So they said the Hatura family was a rouge family that formed when the Keiigakure village formed. Once the clan formed they looked for world domination. They knew that they would get it if every member had a doujutsu and if they controlled at least 1 bijuu they would get what they want. So to get the doujutsu they wanted they had to sacrifice 3 of their members and seal 1 bijuu inside 1 of their members. So once they sacraficed 3 of their members thye wanted to good jinchuriki that the bijuu can hold inside. That is when Keii comes in the story. His parents borned him and told the clan leader that they would be willing to make their son a jinchuriki so that they can get their own doujutsu the silver eye. The silver eye is somewhat like the sharingan. It can copy others move but just for about an hour or 2. And the other similarity is the more the user uses this doujutsu the less they can see or hear. And you can see the future by like a minute or 2. So before his mother and father sealed it inside him they all died by their own darkness turning against them. Then the beast sealed itself inside Keii but no fully. So after the ninja's told him how he was born and became a jinchuriki they told him to join them since his clan is hiding from him inside another village. They told him that they abandoned him and that he should go there and kill them. Aiko nodded as they knew if he killed them he'd get the Silver Eye and he would join them for destroying villages. So they told him that they were hiding in Kirigakure. So here begins the invasion of the Kirigakure so that Keii can kill his clan. When they first arrived there the Hatura clan already blended in with the village so nobody knew that they were in that clan. So once Keii came his clan could already feel his chakra from 2 miles away. The evil inside it. They knew that Keii came to kill them all. They knew that he came to claim the silver eye. They all brought their katana's. That was another thing that was special about the Hatura clan. They were specialist in weapons. So once Keii came they all charged with their might but the missing ninja's and Keii were to much for them. Easily they were defeated and the Hatura clan almost came to extinction with the only survivor, Keii. So once he defeated all of them he felt his blood vessels feel different. He knew that he had gained the Silver Eyes and was happy. With it he could easily defeat his opponents. So once that happened he went back to his village and told them that he went on a fishing trip but they knew that Keii was different. They knew that he had done something evil. Because the dark chakra grew when he came back. His personality also changed.


Aiko shot up from his rest. With chuunin exams around the corner he needed to be training not sleeping. It was already 9:00 in the morning. "Crap" Aiko said aloud. HE moved to the closet and slid it open looking around he found the lighting jutsu pile that he had stocked the night befor. After a moment he found what he was looking for. It was a lighting scroll based on a move called Chidori. It required a lot of lighting chakra be foucused the hand but as Aiko read he thought about the consequnces if he missed with suchs a move it would screw him because hed be almost our of chakra and he could only run in a straight line while useing it and at a speed that he wouldnt be able to for see a counter attck untill it hit him. "Sounds like a useless jutsu" Aiko thought to himself. After a moment Aiko pulled the scroll out further and read about the extensions fo it that required him to know how to do chidori first. Oh well here goes nothing. Aiko read the scroll over and over again it said that he had to put a large amount of lightning-chakra into his hand. The large amount of lighting chakra would make a sound like many birds chirping. "That explains the stupid name" Aiko though to himself. Once hes got the chakra on his hand he charges and thrusts his hand into the enemy if conected it is usally enought o kill them. The charge due to its speed must be in a straight line. Once he had the scroll memorized Aiko grabbed the katana and then thought that for once it would be safer here at the apartment. So Aiko Stuffed it under the scrolls on the "Learned" Shelf and headed out to his usually training grounds.

What was once a nice tree circle now was a bunch of stumps and one dead tree sitting in a hole that Aiko dug. It was the tree that Aiko had mastered his lighting elemnet on. He was proud of himself for that day which waas why he had stuck the tree upright in the ground. But today if he accomplished his goal it would be destroyed. Aiko moved to the cliff side standing 10 feet from it just incase he pased out and fell backwards. Aiko got in a akward postion. He used his left hand and grabbed his right wrist after bringing his hands together in the middle. Aiko foucused as much chakra as he could into the hand. It wasnt enough he was only getting sparks here and there. Finally he went all out and put 99% of his chakra into it and still all he got was sparks. He couldnt understand why this jutsu didnt require hand signs. just concentration. After a minute. Aiko tried again he made his hand into a fist and all he got was a little bit of glowing so he tried diffrent one handed hand signs without luck. finally he tried to just make his hand into the shape of a tiger claw. "SUCESS" Aiko thought to himself. The shape of his had had caused strands of lighting chakra to start connecting non-adjasenct fingers. Which he hadent gotten befor. "Ha ha ha" Aiko laughed out loud. Suddenly the chakra that was foucusing began to fade. Aikofreaked "Whats going on???" Aiko said "What th-" Aiko collapsed he forgot how much chakra this was costing him and he just ran out.

Awaking a few hours later as it was getting dark. Aiko was sore and had almost no engery but he rose to he feet and truged home anyways. The entire way Aiko was cussing at himself. Not onyl had he failed to do the jutsutoday he lost track of his chakra because of how excited he was about a few sparks and and hadgone and koncked himself out. Once home he checked his katana and it wa still there so he crawled into bed and passed out again.

Awaking the next moring refreshed but still not 100% Aiko went down stairs and just did some chores for him this is how things went for the rest of the week. Finally after a week of soreness Aiko got fed up with waiting and he went back to his traing grounds.

Once there he got the sparks back and the began to concentrate anda few seconds of rapid build up Aiko herd shirping and nothing but chirping. "How annoying!" Aiko thought to himself Then he aimed for the tree. He charge he crossed the area in hlaf a second with his arm extended out in front of him he short straight throught the three and went into the rock behind it. "Holy crap" Aiko was blown away by the speed he knew it would be fast but didnt realize it would be this fast. Aiko straightened up he was almost out of chakra and now his arm sorta hurt since he crased into solid stone. He went home he wanted to expand on his new technique.

Sorry, Genin. Lots of grammar issues and typos.

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Aiko got in a akward postion.

Once there he got the sparks back and the began to concentrate anda few seconds of rapid build up Aiko herd shirping and nothing but chirping. "How annoying!" Aiko thought to himself Then he aimed for the tree.

HE moved to the closet and slid it open looking around he found the lighting jutsu pile that he had stocked the night befor. After a moment he found what he was looking for. It was a lighting scroll based on a move called Chidori. It required a lot of lighting chakra be foucused the hand but as Aiko read he thought about the consequnces if he missed with suchs a move it would screw him because hed be almost our of chakra and he could only run in a straight line while useing it and at a speed that he wouldnt be able to for see a counter attck untill it hit him

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Aiko next part of training for the day was the Body Flicker Technique. It would be a helpful jutsu for getting away from enemies and their attacks. He sat their by the lake reading the scroll about the new jutsu. "The user must use their chakra to temporarily vitalize the body and legs in order for the user to move at extreme speeds." "alright, sounds easy enough." He stood up and stretched a little and then began focusing his chakra. Suddenly he took off and appeared about 15 meters away. "whoa, too far. i guess i used too much chakra." He closed his eyes and tried again. He appeared by a tree about 10 meters away from his position. "hmmm, i think im getting the hang of this." After a few more tries, he was able to appear at or right next to the exact location he was trying for. "a good technique, now for the next one."

Aiko feeling bored of learning Close Combat Jutsu wanted to learn a Longed Range Jutsu and reads a paper.Selling Puppets at Suna. Only 1 for 5 ryo.''Hmmm. ''Back at home their selling puppets and for only 5 ryo. I'm going there definitely.'' When Aiko was at Suna he see's a guy selling 5 puppets. The guy says ''GET YOUR PUPPETS!!! ONLY 5 RYO!!!.'' Aiko says ''Hey I'll like to buy a puppet.'' He hands the man 5 ryo as the man gives him a puppet. Before Aiko leaved the man said ''Here is a manual on how to use a puppet.'' he hands it to Aiko as he leaves and goes outside Suna gates. He looks at the first step of the manual as he was about to preform it.''First you need to put your chakra strings on the puppets limbs.'' Aiko makes chakra strings come on all of his fingers as he throws the manual book away. He then puts 5 strings on the puppets legs as 5 on his hands. He then starts to move his hands as the puppet starts to move. After an hour of controlling the puppet Aiko feels tired and rests outside.

Aiko smirked as he noticed that he slightly needed to work on his jutsu. Since he mastered Ninjutsu he wanted to learn another specif type of jutsu. When he found this scroll of Mist Servant Technique he smirked.''Looks like from now on I should learn Genjutsu so I can confuse Masuru. Last I should learn Taijutsu so I dont only have to worry about my chakra. He read the instructions out loud as he made his chakra flow all over his body.''Kasumi Juusha no Jutsu is a Genjutsu
technique that creates false attackers to delay and confuse the enemy.
Though these servants are not real, the actual ninja is able to remain
hidden and throw kunai and shuriken matching the movements of the
servants. This makes it appear the false servants are capable of
attacking. When the enemy attempts to attack the servant, they will
merely disrupt the servants illusion body but not destroy it.'' ''Hmmm sounds easy to do.'' Aiko concentrated his chakra until it flowed all over his body as he tried to make a clone. Oil came out as it only popped. Aiko kicked the oil as it didnt do anything.''Great now I'm affected by my own genjutsu.'' Aiko then smirked as he put his hands to the oil and focused all of his chakra into it. A clone appeared as it surprised Aiko. He tried to punch it as his hands became all slippery. He smiled as it smiled back. It returned to it's normal form as Aiko canceled the jutsu. He picked up the scroll so he can see more jutsu's that he could learn.

Aiko yawned as he was bored. He had most of the jutsu and he wanted to progress on his shadow clones. He thought about the battle with the jounins and Masuru as he said alright I'm going to learn Shadow Shuriken today. He walked to a weapon shop as he asked the clerk ''Do you guys have a Fuma Shuriken?'' ''Yea but it'll be 50 per each.'' Aiko takes out a kunai as he said ''Give me two for free or you die.'' The clerk flinches as he hands two Fuma Shurikens to Aiko. Aiko body flickers out of the place so he wouldnt get caught as he dropped the two big shurikens. He sighed as he read the scroll of jutsu he always had.''Ok first I got to make a clone that does henge and turns into the shuriken. Then I throw the two shurikens while the clone comes out and throws a kunai at the opponent.'' Aiko frowns as he makes a clone. The clone turns into a Fuma Shuriken as Aiko grabs 2 of the real Fuma Shurikens he brought. He threw all 3 shurikens as the clones dispels the Henge Jutsu as he threw a kunai at a tree. The two real Fuma Shurikens hit the clone as Aiko smiled. Aiko took the two shurikens from the tree as he jumped back and threw them again. All 3 shurikens turned into clones this time as they hit the tree with a kunai.''Wow I'm getting the hang of it already. Let me try one more time so I can master it.'' Aiko throws each shuriken at the same time as he dispels the henge jutsu. 3 clones pop up again as they throw a kunai at the tree. Aiko smiles as they high five each other. The clones disappear as Aiko was reading the scroll for the next jutsu he should learn.

Aiko has an evil laugh as he read about dead soul jutsu. He saw a village nearby as he ran up to the gates. When he reached the gates 2 inches away from the village Aiko started to sweat. His eyes saw guards everywhere. He took a deep breath as he flowed his chakra around his body. He smiled as he screamed out ''Mist Servant Technique.'' Next the whole village warped into a forest as oil was everywhere. All of the villagers were surprised as some where scared. Next the oil took the form of Aiko as they all smiled. They start running in a horizontal line as they 'punched' the villagers. One of the villagers was so scared that he peed in his pants. Then Aiko warned the villagers saying ''Watch out there going to throw kunai's.'' They 'threw' kunai's as Aiko jumped from the tree and threw a real shuriken at a villager. The kunai went into the villagers mouth as it stopped at his esophagus. The villager choked to deaf as some of the guards said ''You monster! Why would you destroy the peace at our village?'' ''Because I wanted to perfect my newest jutsu Dead Soul Jutsu.'' The guards looked in shock as they brought out Fuma Shurikens. Aiko smiled as he took out his scroll and opened it.''Release.'' 2 Fuma Shurikens came out as he told the guards ''You'll be nice for decoys.'' The guards became angry with his words as Aiko did Shadow Clone Jutsu.''Stand your ground!'' One guard said as he ran up to Aiko. Aiko smiled as he threw the Fuma Shuriken at the guard. It went right threw the guard's stomach. The Shuriken changed directions when another guard kicked it as the henge clone dispelled.''Watch out. He's doing......'' The guard died from the other shuriken that Aiko threw as he smiled. All the other guards pleaded for mercy as Aiko each cut there throat out. For the villagers Aiko left them to be. He sealed all of the dead bodies in one empty scroll he had as he leaved. Now time to train on that jutsu. Aiko concentrated all of his chakra into the scroll as he shouted out ''Dead Soul Jutsu.'' All 5 of the dead guards came from a purple portal came out. They started to make zombie sounds as they had the same appearance they had when Aiko killed him. 1 guard had a shuriken stuck in his throat still while another 1 had his body chopped off. He was walking with his limbs as Aiko was holding his body. 3 other guards had no head. Aiko smiled as he released the jutsu.''Looks like this jutsu would come in handy with my fight with Masuru.'' Aiko smiled as he yawned. He feel asleep. Tomorrow he wanted to train some more so he could become powerful.

-Previous RP sample disqualified-

Genin.

Your writing isn't very realistic - you are mastering things on a few hours when it should take days in real life.
Also, you miss a lot of punctuation, grammar and capitals and such.
Sometimes your writing is a little bit out of time - you may put the wrong tense in some cases.

However, some good ideas and gory deaths(!) here. Keep practising!

Aiko, RP sample is 1 try only. After you've done one, you must take exams to rank up.

Thats why go and join that EM: Warm up for Ninjas, to unlock chuunin exams.

(His previous one was disqualified due to part of it being copied)

Rly? xD

Btw, you didn't give him the DP and Free techs >_>


1 DP and 2 free D rank techs.

I could always help him with Roleplaying if he gave me the chance...

Ok....?

Do that then, Aiko, let him

Sure, ^^

Just ask me if you want to practice a bit, in PM's, or whatever. I'll be glad to.

Thank-you, Iki, for helping Aiko (If he agrees)

And Aiko, you have free
2 D rank techs

Mist Servant Technique
Body Flicker Technique

Approved, Locked!